LIVE THE LIFE
A very funny short and weird looking man,
out of nowhere appeared and tightly held my hand.
He scratched me twice and hugged me once.
I was surprised, shocked and stunned.
and “who are you ?” came out my question.
with that his face gave out the naughtiest expression.
He started to laugh out loud ….loudly as he can,
and then appeared his two little wings when he started to sing.
“I knew you forgot me and you failed to understand
that I’m the LIFE you are just forgetting to LIVE
To you I might be a little mean
but little more if you could lean
You will see a funny, sweet man as short as a bean
I will fly with you. Yes with you I shall leave
as my time here is synonym to my height and size
But before that promise me you will learn how to live
Live me more, Live me king-size
But yes don’t forget to Wear your heart upon your sleeve “
I' was trying to write a poem
My reason for trying out a poem after 3 years is when a fellow blogger invited me to do a guest post on his blog and all his guest post were poetry's so I thought why not give a try this one can be no match to the real veteran poets over there, but again in the end its mine
comments/suggestions would love to read them
wow! You are truly talented. Continue writing. liked it ekdum cool, good ending easy poem to read and understand..
ReplyDeletethanks archana , aapne yeh kasht uttaya....for reading my poetry !!
ReplyDeleteThat is so cool... Very nice bhavna :)
ReplyDeletethanks Bhavana
ReplyDeleteso well rhymed Bhavna :)
ReplyDeleteGood things attract you and I'm reading it 3rd time in a day. Great work Bhavna. Again, we love you!
ReplyDeletethanks saru :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Sujatha :) sometimes my rhyming works too
Thanks to you too Jidhu
Sunil, thanks for the generous compliment
wow..that's amazing...live life king size :)
ReplyDeleteIt is not an attempt...but truly very well written.
ReplyDeleteEvery one want to fly ... , me also... ^_^ . Thanks Bhavna, 4r your sweet rhymes.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem! I used to love poetry.
ReplyDeleteIf that's your attempt, can't wait to see what your real stuff is! =)
lovely bhavna...though it has been 3 years nw...u were a gr8 poet..u r a gr8 poet n u will be a gr8 poet...creative ppl dnt 4get or loose der creativity..its jst dat dey take a break from what dey hv been doing...jst like u.....
ReplyDeleteWelcome Back dear.....
you may wanna try www.picplz.com I use that for twisting the boring phone camera photos...and ofcourse Picasa. Am yet to buy photoshop...so will try in few days..
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What an amazing piece of work! look foward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteI'm also now following you via Google Friends thing :)
Very impressed by the metaphor and the way you put across the message.
ReplyDeletebrilliant!
Imho, Attempt would be an understatement.
keep it goin;)